After reviewing Ivan’s brochure on NYJIUJITSU I have made many observations. One major thing to start off with would be the cover of course. The cover page was able to include all the proper information. The only one thing that was an eye sore was the distance between the logo and “Manhattan Dojo”. This can be easily fixed by moving up the words or centering the logo between “American Jiu-Jitsu” and “Manhattan Dojo”. The black curve is great, but the color of the brochure wasn’t appealing to me. As for the interior, the typography was on point. One tiny hiccup that I noticed was that between headers and text there was no space. Adding spacing increases the importance of the header and draws attention To conclude, Ivan’s brochure was very organized and has an abundance of information.
After reviewing Gene’s brochure on NYCINKMASTERS. I have made many observations. The cover page has a lot of white space. Another flaw would be that “Nyc Ink Masters: is repeated at the top and bottom of the page. The order of the panels are also jumbled around. These are all minor flaws, therefore they are easy fixes. For example, deletion of the repeated words, adding some color in the background, and reorganizing the panels. On the bright side the pictures aren’t stretched. As for the interior, there is an abundance of whitespace. Adding a sort of collage would have been a great idea. Also adding background information on the shop would help fill the space.
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